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[PaulM]

Hallo

Ich benötige unbedingt eure Hilfe. Hab übermorgen einen kleinen aber trotzdem wichtigen Test zu schreiben, den ich nicht mehr aufschieben möchte.

Um mich von meiner Last zu befreien, hab ich mich schon mal vorbereitet.

Ich bitte euch höflichst, diesen Text mal durchzulesen und eventuell Fehler oder Verbesserungsvorschläge aufzuzeigen. Für Veränderungs-, Verbesserungsvorschläge bin ich offen.


Ich danke euch im Voraus für die Hilfe.

mfg PaulM



I have attended business school from 2003 until 2008 in Upper Austria. During my school career in business school I have played soccer.
My hobby allowed to make break from learning three times per week. Soccer was a well method for changing my minds but also very arduous.

I never thought I would be a professional player. When I was a little boy I wanted to become an aviator but when I become older there also were other interests. I have studied a lot about personal management in business school. There were many inputs about employment law. I found my interest in this borough and decided to study law of science.

Now I am studying law science at the university since October 2009. After completing the business school I stopped playing soccer. I have started my basic service in military for six month. I have learned some important experiences and I will not forget this time.

During military I had no time for playing soccer so I took the time for deciding the nearest university. I decided to study law of science and on my opinion it was a good decision.

I never forget my dream job when I was a little boy so I will make the test for an aviator education in summer 2010.[/b]

[ingot]

Hallo PaulM,

da gibt es schon so einiges zu verbessern. Ich werde mir das heute abend vornehmen.

Gruß
ingot
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When the final curtain drops, the applause may be less than thunderous. So what! There is no more need for bows.

[ingot]

I attended business school in Upper Austria from 2003 until 2008. While attending business school, I played soccer which gave me a break from studying, three times a week. Soccer allowed me to take my mind off school work although it was not without challenges of its own.

I never thought of becoming a professional soccer player. In fact, when I was a little boy I wanted to be a pilot. But, as I grew older, there were other interests. In business school, I studied a lot about personnel management which included a good deal of employment law. That is where I found that my true interest lay and I decided to study law.

I have now been studying law at the university since October 2009. After graduating from business school I stopped playing soccer.
Following that, I served my military requirement of six months of basic training, an important experience which I will not soon forget.

While in the military, I had no time for playing soccer, instead I looked around for a suitable university. I reached the decision to study law, which turned out to be a good decision, in my opinion.

During all that, I have never forgotten my childhood dream of becoming a pilot, and so I will take the test for pilot training in the summer of 2010.
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When the final curtain drops, the applause may be less than thunderous. So what! There is no more need for bows.

[ingot]

Ich hatte übersehen, dass es sich hier um einen Test handelt. Ich mache also das Ganze noch einmal und verbessere nur das Gröbste.


I attended business school in Upper Austria from 2003 until 2008. During my school career in business school I played soccer.
My hobby allowed me to have a break from learning three times per week. Soccer was a good way of distracting my mind, but was also very strenuous.

I never thought I would be a professional player. When I was a little boy, I wanted to become an aviator, but when I became older there also were other interests. I studied a lot about personnel management in business school. There were many references to employment law. I found my interest in this area and decided to study law.

Now, I have been studying law at the university since October 2009. After completing business school I stopped playing soccer. I started my basic service in the military for six months. I have learned some important experiences and I will not forget this time.

While I was in the military I had no time for playing soccer so I took the time to look for the nearest university. I decided to study law, and in my opinion it was a good decision.

I never forgot my dream job from when I was a little boy,and so I will take the test for pilot training in summer 2010.[/b]
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When the final curtain drops, the applause may be less than thunderous. So what! There is no more need for bows.

[PaulM]

Ich danke dir für die schnelle Hilfe. Jetzt muss ich den Text nur noch lernen.

Vielen Dank

mfg PaulM