Kann mir jemand helfen?

[cRazy]

Hallo liebe Leute! Ich habe eben 'nen kleinen Text geschrieben, der mich beschreiben soll... Bin mir aber nicht 100%ig sicher, ob das alles so richtig ist! Was denkt ihr?

I really don't know what to say about me... Well let me start with words that would describe me best... I'm a nice person... very thoughtful and smart. I really like to try new things and I would say I am really open-minded. I love all kind of people - I don't really care what they look like or what they do or whatever, cuz at the end of the day we're all like brothers and sisters and I think we should have nothing but love for each other. Well, I can be a childish mess too sometimes, lol... And stubborn... And I am always late - I really don't know why, but I just can't be on time and if I see somethin I love and really want - and if the money is there - I just buy it, lol... So I guess I'm not good with money! When it comes to music I enjoy any kind of music... well almost any, lol! I speak english and german (would like to learn more languages though)

Kann man das so stehen lassen oder sind da noch viele Fehler drin? Und wie würde man so 'nen Text am Besten beenden? Also mit was für einem Satz? "That's enough", oder ähnliches, klingt einfach zu komisch und irgendwie unpassend. Ich hoffe ihr könnt mir helfen!

[lykos]

Hi!

I think it´s quite OK , but just hold on until Ingot looks at it. For the time beeing, USA is sleeping!
Lykos
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[ingot]

Hallo Resie (?),

You write quite well on an American teen-age level. Depending on what the purpose of this "self-portrait" is, you can just leave it as is or make the corrections I have suggested. A few minor things, such as commas, are included in the text. If this is meant to describe yourself to your peers in a forum, spellings like "cuz" are quite acceptable. If, on the other hand,
you wish to impress somebody with your knowledge of "proper" style, you should write "because". The same goes for your ending. Assuming you prefer to keep the tone of this informal, I have added something that might be appropriate.
You have a good feel for the language!

Greets,
ingot

I really don't know what to say about me ( myself )... Well, let me start with words that would describe me best... I'm a nice person... very thoughtful and smart. I really like to try new things and I would say I am really open-minded. I love all kinds of people - I don't really care what they look like or what they do or whatever, cuz (because ) ,at the end of the day, we're all like brothers and sisters and I think we should have nothing but love for each other. Well, I can be a childish mess, too, sometimes, lol... And stubborn... And I am always late - I really don't know why, but I just can't be on time and if ( when )I see something I love and really want - and if the money is there - I just buy it, lol... So, I guess I'm not good with money! When it comes to music, I enjoy any kind of music... well almost any, lol! I speak English and German (would like to learn more languages, though)
Well, I think you get the general picture by now, don't you
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